Monday, February 21, 2011

facets of love 1.0 (Tanka)

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like a pepper vine
climbing the betelnut palm
under the full moon
ripe with urgent promises
i yield to your quiet strength

© 2011 Padmavani Karkera







This Tanka is in response to part two of the feature on Tanka by Lady Nyo at the One Stop Poetry Form Monday.  Last Monday I wrote a Tanka on Perseverance. Five measly lines took me two hours, most of which was spent in getting in place the right 7 syllables for the last line! This time too the last line took most of an hour which I took to write this. Beautiful exercise!
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17 comments:

  1. AsobimeFebruary 21, 2011 at 10:01 PM

    Love it! Very nice, very much into the Japanese 'sensibility'.

    Lady Nyo

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  2. AnonymousFebruary 21, 2011 at 11:10 PM

    Lovely formal Tanka!

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  3. UnknownFebruary 21, 2011 at 11:22 PM

    Beautiful and evocative Padmavani. Your writing is always so thought provoking - lovely.

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  4. Maude LynnFebruary 22, 2011 at 12:16 AM

    Gorgeous, gorgeous, gorgeous!

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  5. hedgewitchFebruary 22, 2011 at 12:31 AM

    Very smooth and sensual, yet refined and wise. I like it very much.

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  6. Ami MattisonFebruary 22, 2011 at 1:16 AM

    Wow! What a beautiful tanka! Love its sensuality and its evocativeness! Great, great write!

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  7. ReflectionsFebruary 22, 2011 at 2:00 AM

    Beautifully written... worth the effort it took to compose.

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  8. PennyFebruary 22, 2011 at 2:29 AM

    Lovely imagery.

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  9. MaureenFebruary 22, 2011 at 3:31 AM

    Well done, Padmavani. I like your use of pepper vine and betelnut palm for the exotic quality they convey.

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  10. Brian MillerFebruary 22, 2011 at 6:02 AM

    oh lovely turn in your tanka...and love the sensuality...

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  11. jocodeaneFebruary 22, 2011 at 4:51 PM

    Almost sounds like someone being strangled.
    Underground current of power.
    I am amazed with all the different takes on this format.

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  12. knot eyeFebruary 22, 2011 at 9:02 PM

    ahhh, nice...a natural feeling of acquiescence
    do pepper vines really grow on betelnut trees?... off to google land to see

    Peace, hp

    thank you for stopping by

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  13. knot eyeFebruary 22, 2011 at 9:05 PM

    well I'll be

    In India, pepper vines (betel pepper, Piper betle) or black pepper (P.nigrum) are often trained onto the trunks of betel nut palms.

    makes your tanka even better

    Peace, hp

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  14. lizziviggiFebruary 23, 2011 at 6:09 AM

    Oooh, lovely, strong imagery. I had to go back and enjoy it again, reading the first three lines and then the last three lines separately-- it holds up beautifully in the many ways a tanka can be read!

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  15. PadmavaniFebruary 23, 2011 at 6:00 PM

    Thank you all so much for your appreciation! I must say I didn't expect these reactions :)

    I have revised an old poem and linked it to this week's One Shot Wednesday. Just look for my name there. Thank you.

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  16. CathyFebruary 28, 2011 at 11:48 AM

    Delicious.

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  17. PadmavaniFebruary 28, 2011 at 2:31 PM

    Thank you Cathy. Lovely expression, delicious...what more could I ask for :)

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