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| Artist: Aja Apa-Soura |
familiar maze
of ear
goose bumps
scatter like
poppy seeds
veins flutter
butterfly wings
inside elbow
fevered thrusts
like oceans
on full-moon
urgent lips
wet, pliant
potter's clay
bodies bow
like milk
rises overflows
sated limbs
quiver from
residual heat
© 2011 Padmavani Karkera
Victoria Ceretto-Slotto discusses texture as a writing tool in Poetics at www.dversepoets.com I tried my hand on it and this is the result. Do let me know what you think. Thank you!
beautiful poem, really felt it, "familiar maze of ear" - love this
ReplyDeleteThe title is so....erotic, just like the poem. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteLovely and very sharply painted images make this both sensuous and mentally agile. The textures are strong and vivid as well, especially in the last few tercets. Really enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteYou have completely captured 'textures' in and throughout this wonderful piece. My favourite part is the second stanza: goose bumps scatter like poppy seeds. Beautiful! Well done Padmavani, I find it impossible to write on cue, but you have done it perfectly here.
ReplyDeleteoh nice textures for sure...poppy seeds and butterfly wings...both of those were great touches...
ReplyDeletepliant
ReplyDeletepotter's clay
bodies bow
like milk
rises overflows
wonderful textural lines among many, thank you!
Sensuous and much to the point of being steamy. It captures the feel of the young at heart in their special relationships. Beautiful poem!
ReplyDeleteSensuous, tender textures tantalizing the soul.
ReplyDeletePadmavani,
ReplyDeleteVery sensuous and erotic poem.... I love loved it
xoxo
jessica
Lovely poem! Liked it all - the title and the lines of poem.... Really Erotic!!!
ReplyDeleteVery sensual, erotic, and well written poem.
ReplyDeleteHere is my offering for this first Gooseberry Garden picnic: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/21/this-eden/
Sensuous poem.....awesome :)
ReplyDeletepowerful and hot.
ReplyDeletewell done.
Just a lovely image--painting and words. You wove the texture theme in seemingly with ease. Thanks so much for sharing this with dVerse.
ReplyDeleteNice painting and sensual words... I like the texture of intimacy.
ReplyDeleteFor the prompt on Adam and Eve, here is my share:
http://a-sweetlust.blogspot.com/2011/05/forbidden-fruit.html
hmmm I want an embrace like that, lovely ending :)
ReplyDeleteMine is here: http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/08/19/fragment-of-yesteryear/
thank you for the warm birthday wishes today...smiles.
ReplyDeleteOh, I think you did a superb job on this--very "tactile"!
ReplyDeleteReally beautiful & passionate.
ReplyDeleteDelicous...
ReplyDeleteTextures it is all the way, Padma...Great stuff!
ReplyDeleteWonderful magic. Made me wonder all the way.
ReplyDeletePadmavani, this is excellent. Love the tercets, and your phrasing is scintillating in many places. Great read
ReplyDeletedifferent:- interesting too. Stumbled into your blog through Indiblogger today.
ReplyDeleteSensationsal blog eh?
gr8
lovely sensual lines...nicely crafted words!
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