bring a picture of yours
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Image Courtesy: Tess Kincaid |
dear daddy
sr.ursula took us out last week
mr.wilson invited class 5(my class)
for a picnic in his garden
we sat on white benches and
had sandwiches and lemonade
i stole the placemat
hid it in my pinafore
the lemons reminded me of you
maybe because sister tells me
you are now on garden duty
when i got back to the convent
i cut it up into four pieces
gave a piece each to meena, emily and pearl
my good deed for the day
and i am sending mine to you
because sr.ursula says
giving somebody something that you love
means you love them more
i hope i can see you soon
and please bring a picture of yours
i will keep your picture in my book
and then when i think of you
i will not have to look out of the
window at the lemon trees
don't forget, bring your picture along
i wish i could visit you
mother superior wont let me, she says
prison is no place for young ladies
but i am just 8
would you call me a young lady
love and kisses
your loving daughter
Rose
© 2011 Padmavani Karkera
I wrote this poem(if you can call it that) in response to the image prompt provided by Tess Kincaid on her blog Magpie Tales I am also presenting this at www.onestoppoetry.com for their One Shot Wednesday. I look forward to your feedback as always. Thank you!
I really like this take on the prompt from the child's point of view. Well done.
ReplyDeleteIf not the most gorgeous poem I've ever read. Absolutely beautiful and stunning...
ReplyDeleteSo sweet and sad! Lovely.
ReplyDeleteI adore writing in the form of correspondence. This is so charming. Well done.
ReplyDeletePoignant and powerful!
ReplyDeleteWhat a sweet poem! I really like how it's in the form of a letter told from the child's point of view. And I like the reveal towards the end--I certainly didn't see the father's imprisonment coming. Nice job!
ReplyDeletei will keep your picture in my book
ReplyDeleteand then when i think of you
i will not have to look out of the
window at the lemon trees
very well written...you caught me totally off guard with the mention of prison and when i read it a second time i realized the importance of 'garden duty'...Good writing through the eyes of a child!
Another excellent use of the imagination with this (to me) difficult picture. Very well done, simple and understated, clear with a child's unquestioning love.
ReplyDeleteWhat a different take on this picture! I think your poem is brilliant on so many different levels. Great work as always!
ReplyDeletePoignant piece... love the innocence, yet lost innocence of one writing to a father in prison... great mag response.
ReplyDeleteOh my God.. what a moving poem, Padma!! Beautiful.. and so sad...
ReplyDeleteThe innocence of this 8-yr old "lady" just rendered me speechless!
How beautifully you have written her mind's words here, my friend...
Hats off to you!! I hope her dad is a good man, and I hope he gets out of prison soon...
Thank you all for visiting and being so generous with your praise :)
ReplyDeleteCheers
Padmavani
very powerful imagery.
ReplyDeletecheers.
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Dear P,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the standard 5th "lady" speaking here! Very vividly descriptive from a child's mindset :)
sending her huge wishes
Lovely magpie
xxx
keep it up.
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