bring a picture of yours

Image Courtesy: Tess Kincaid
21-03-1969

dear daddy

sr.ursula took us out last week
mr.wilson invited class 5(my class)
for a picnic in his garden
we sat on white benches and
had sandwiches and lemonade

i stole the placemat
hid it in my pinafore
the lemons reminded me of you
maybe because sister tells me
you are now on garden duty

when i got back to the convent
i cut it up into four pieces
gave a piece each to meena, emily and pearl
my good deed for the day
and i am sending mine to you

because sr.ursula says
giving somebody something that you love
means you love them more
i hope i can see you soon
and please bring a picture of yours

i will keep your picture in my book
and then when i think of you
i will not have to look out of the
window at the lemon trees
don't forget, bring your picture along

i wish i could visit you
mother superior wont let me, she says
prison is no place for young ladies
but i am just 8
would you call me a young lady

love and kisses
your loving daughter
Rose


© 2011 Padmavani Karkera

I wrote this poem(if you can call it that) in response to the image prompt provided by Tess Kincaid on her blog Magpie Tales I am also presenting this at www.onestoppoetry.com for their One Shot Wednesday. I look forward to your feedback as always. Thank you!

Comments

  1. I really like this take on the prompt from the child's point of view. Well done.

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  2. If not the most gorgeous poem I've ever read. Absolutely beautiful and stunning...

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  3. I adore writing in the form of correspondence. This is so charming. Well done.

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  4. What a sweet poem! I really like how it's in the form of a letter told from the child's point of view. And I like the reveal towards the end--I certainly didn't see the father's imprisonment coming. Nice job!

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  5. i will keep your picture in my book
    and then when i think of you
    i will not have to look out of the
    window at the lemon trees

    very well written...you caught me totally off guard with the mention of prison and when i read it a second time i realized the importance of 'garden duty'...Good writing through the eyes of a child!

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  6. Another excellent use of the imagination with this (to me) difficult picture. Very well done, simple and understated, clear with a child's unquestioning love.

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  7. What a different take on this picture! I think your poem is brilliant on so many different levels. Great work as always!

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  8. Poignant piece... love the innocence, yet lost innocence of one writing to a father in prison... great mag response.

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  9. Oh my God.. what a moving poem, Padma!! Beautiful.. and so sad...
    The innocence of this 8-yr old "lady" just rendered me speechless!
    How beautifully you have written her mind's words here, my friend...
    Hats off to you!! I hope her dad is a good man, and I hope he gets out of prison soon...

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  10. Thank you all for visiting and being so generous with your praise :)
    Cheers
    Padmavani

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  11. very powerful imagery.
    cheers.

    Please feel free to share 1 to 3 poems with our potluck poetry today, Thanks..
    Happy Monday!

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  12. Dear P,

    I enjoyed the standard 5th "lady" speaking here! Very vividly descriptive from a child's mindset :)

    sending her huge wishes
    Lovely magpie

    xxx

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  13. keep it up.

    Welcome joining poets rally week 40,
    all submissions will be fully represented by the end of the week,
    visit me for details today.. hope to see you in..

    Cheers.
    Happy Writing..
    xx

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