Tanka (love)

like a pepper vine
climbing the betelnut palm
under the full moon
ripe with urgent promises
i yield to your quiet strength

© 2011 Padmavani Karkera
This Tanka is in response to part two of the feature on Tanka by Lady Nyo at the One Stop Poetry Form Monday.  Last Monday I wrote a Tanka on Perseverance. Five measly lines took me two hours, most of which was spent in getting in place the right 7 syllables for the last line! This time too the last line took most of an hour which I took to write this. Beautiful exercise!

Comments

  1. Love it! Very nice, very much into the Japanese 'sensibility'.

    Lady Nyo

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  2. Lovely formal Tanka!

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  3. Beautiful and evocative Padmavani. Your writing is always so thought provoking - lovely.

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  4. Very smooth and sensual, yet refined and wise. I like it very much.

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  5. Wow! What a beautiful tanka! Love its sensuality and its evocativeness! Great, great write!

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  6. Beautifully written... worth the effort it took to compose.

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  7. Well done, Padmavani. I like your use of pepper vine and betelnut palm for the exotic quality they convey.

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  8. oh lovely turn in your tanka...and love the sensuality...

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  9. Almost sounds like someone being strangled.
    Underground current of power.
    I am amazed with all the different takes on this format.

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  10. ahhh, nice...a natural feeling of acquiescence
    do pepper vines really grow on betelnut trees?... off to google land to see

    Peace, hp

    thank you for stopping by

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  11. well I'll be

    In India, pepper vines (betel pepper, Piper betle) or black pepper (P.nigrum) are often trained onto the trunks of betel nut palms.

    makes your tanka even better

    Peace, hp

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  12. Oooh, lovely, strong imagery. I had to go back and enjoy it again, reading the first three lines and then the last three lines separately-- it holds up beautifully in the many ways a tanka can be read!

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  13. Thank you all so much for your appreciation! I must say I didn't expect these reactions :)

    I have revised an old poem and linked it to this week's One Shot Wednesday. Just look for my name there. Thank you.

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  14. Thank you Cathy. Lovely expression, delicious...what more could I ask for :)

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